- Pitch:
2. Reflection on the feedback: What stood out to me was 3/4 of the people who commented on pitch really liked my idea and my pitch as well. Their main points based on the idea were that it is interesting and innovative. For my pitch, they thought it was short and to the point, with very meaningful gestures and clear, expressive words. The only complaint was that I probably should smile more which I realized I should to make more idea more interesting. Although, my last commenter thought that my idea was slightly un-original, and he didn't see the true path of success for my outlet.
3. What I changed based on the feedback: Because all the comments on my pitch itself were positive, I tried to keep it short and sweet as well as keeping my gestures expressive with concise word choice. I did try to smile more which I hope is noticeable because I realized in my 2nd elevator pitch how dull it sounded. Then on the idea, based on my last comment, although it went a little longer than my last pitch, I felt like I needed to do that to make my idea more innovative and creative. I did this by describing how the outlets will work better and how advantageous they will be to workers. I also provided an alternate solution with the charging stations which I added just in case light power wasn't enough. I also described more so who will be my target audience and why I'll be successful with those people.
James,
ReplyDeleteVery good overall. You were dressed professionally, you were enthusiastic, your pitch was short and sweet, I loved it. The only thing I would say would to spice it up a bit more and be a tad bit more excited of your idea, some parts seemed a bit boring. The idea is really good also nice job overall.
Here's the link to my elevator pitch, hope you enjoy!
http://jbasta.blogspot.com/2016/03/week-10-elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hey James,
ReplyDeleteI love your elevator pitch. You really gave it your all in this activity. I'm glad you kept it short and sweet. I would love more charging stations because it can be really inconvenient when you lose battery! In Marston, there definitely needs to be more outlets. my pitch is also campus oriented! Here's a link to my blog post: http://jeromerimpos.blogspot.com/2016/03/campus-shuttle-elevator-pitch-no-3.html
Hey james,
ReplyDeleteI really like your elevator pitch.I like that you have your goals stablished and you really know the feedback.What I like the most about your pitch if that you have confidence and the personality.This skills are very important you want to be an entrepreneur in a future and I have a feeling you will be some day.This is the link to my blog http://ndajbura.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html